Hey, I know this story is probs really old and u don't want to continue it but I urge you to do so!
I really like the idea of your story but it's kind laking in the... portrayal department, now I know every writer wants to be unique in their way of writing but sometimes you gotta read it over again and think, 'hey is this understandable' you gotta compare to the other high ranking stories that sometimes even get published! I know this is a pretty small platform to get big on and you probably are just looking at this in a hobby format but the idea of your story is actually really really good and I really wanna read it!
Putting the story in P.O.Vs would be pretty nice and easier to read. Also don't just write everything in a big clump, use paragraphs, italics, bold, different fonts, etc.. to make it unique (Emojis only for author notes and comments obviously).
Thank you if you read this, sorry for wasting your time if you've discontinued the story