SlyWale

It's definitely getting better.  I think a bit more clarity would be good.  Sometimes it seems like you leave out too much when you're trying to add suspense and instead of being suspenseful it ends up just being confusing.  Altogether though it's not bad, keep up the good work :)

SlyWale

HEYY-OOOH!!!!!!
          Good afternoon my lovelies.  I know I'm hella inconsistent in all things wattpad but I'd like to let you all know I've added a chapter to The Named and I've begun seriously revamping Unravelled cuz let's face it, it's kinda shit atm.
          
          Anyway, hope you all had a spook-tastic halloween and be sure to check out The Named and vote!

BecJohnson

Hi Sierra, Thank you so much for reading and voting right the way through Murfey's Law, I really appreciate it :) Bec x

SlyWale

No problem, I thought it was really cute and relatable at the same time.  Not too heavy, not too light :)  Keep up the good work
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SlyWale

It's definitely getting better.  I think a bit more clarity would be good.  Sometimes it seems like you leave out too much when you're trying to add suspense and instead of being suspenseful it ends up just being confusing.  Altogether though it's not bad, keep up the good work :)