Smiles73

Thanks @DragonLuva88 witch book is the first out of your two dragon ones?

Smiles73

Thanks for the advice ill defidently use it. But saving Natalie isn't the climax. In the prologue it talks about them preparing for battle with Natalie that's going to be the climax. Again thank you so much for the advice

petlover002

Hi! I don't know if it was Taylor or Arianna who posted on my wall, but thanks for reading/ adding my story to your library. And if you were implying that you wanted me to read your story then I'd be happy to....(I'm reading it now) Okay done! (took me a lot longer to read cause I got distracted. sorry >.<) Anyways I hope you don't mind me pointing out a few things. (these are just my opinions from one writer to another, feel free to use them or not.) One: I really Love the plot line! The characters and creatures are really cool! two: There is only really one issue about your story and that is you need to slow down! you have all these wonderful ideas, but you're flying through them like it's an everyday thing. And before I knew it we already hit the climax of the story! Some suggestions: More detail, You have this amazing world and you just summarized it in one paragraph! Write more stuff about the place and the people that live there. Make us, the reader, fall in love with this world you have created! I would also suggest slowing your story down, not every thing has to be a race to the finish line so to speak. I understand that Casey just wants to save Natalie, but let the story build up to the climax before you dive right into it. (Maybe instead of all this happening in the course of one day stretch it out to maybe 3 or 4 days.) Doing this will make your story longer and will make readers anticipating the next chapter! Last but never least three: I really liked how as the story progressed, so did your writing. And that's the best part of writing you can have fun doing it while also improving at it! I hope this helps and sorry I wrote so much! 
          STAY AWESOME!!

Smiles73

Thanks that would be me i talk to u on your account sometimes im the one thats favorite hunger games caracter is finnick Arianna's fav is Clove thanks for writing on my board by the way u are pretty awesome @Squakers50 by the way have u read the Percy Jacksons and the reast of the Rick Riordon books they are pretty good