@Ray_of_sunn Yeah well written good....and I would further suggest you to include the English translation in brackets of the hindi dialogues.... you have ig? You can promote your book their too it'll help you reach wider audiance
@SoumojitRick Thank you for your view. I'll try my best to cover my grey areas which you have highlighted and present good story to all readers. Once again Thank you :)
@Ray_of_sunn Personally I would suggest you to add some related pictures in between the stories and you may also include author's note or author's pov to get well connected with your readers and another you may also include few hindi dialogues in between the characters.... I hope you find these suggestions helpful.... otherwise your writing style is completely fine