grimskull117

I like that u haz da halo reach art for ure background and a centurion az ure profile picture humiez

grimskull117

Yeah thanx humiez I've been in da wwaarrr fur da pazt 134 yearz
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Spartan116gr

@grimskull117 U are a bold ork to post on a Human profile :P
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FriendlyMage

It's a pretty good story I love how it's ongoing so there's continually adding something else to the story.
          Some of the things I noticed that kinda but me though are that I think you should adjectives some examples of this are in chapter 1 page 2: when it's talking about the ship, insted of using the word wreck the ship apart you could use rip this ship apart.
          I'll be commenting more

Spartan116gr

ok as for the adjectives i will try to improve them since english is not my first language
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