OldKing

Really means a lot! I really can’t wait to dive back into that world once I’m finished with my other series. So glad you enjoyed it, SI!!!!

I loved reading your book, it really is a master piece and a one of a kind. I can not wait to devour the second one once you’ve posted it

Glad you liked them! After working so long in that world, I found I had more stories to tell. Right now I'm going into final editing with a story about Scarlet. I've also got a draft of about a third of book I'm calling Dragon-Bound Bard.

Thank you! I really enjoyed your King Chronicle books and had a blast reading them

Greay! By the way, I made a mistake, I wrote "misery" when I really wanted to say "mistery" --though, some misery also helps, specially with the helplessness depicted in your chapter.

@AlexMartin69 Thank you so much!!! This has helped a lot and I will definitely go through and fix tenses as best as I can. You really are a great help

The one thing I’ll ask you about your story is the thing where (where = place, were = past tense of are) you mentioned He killed every human being he found. I got either lost or confused and got the idea that all Aryans did the same, although, later on you mention them as dictators, which would contradict a bit the idea of trying to erradicate all humans (if I understood correctly). 
            I think you’ve got a lot of great material here for more than just one chapter. Sometimes is better not to explain a lot at the beginning, just create tension, misery and let the reader know the most key of characters (that’s one advise that has served me well). 
            I hope this was helpful and all I have left to say is that you should keep it up and I’ll be here to read and help you in any way I can!