Hi guys, I just finished revising book 1. Most notable is the last chapter. Here are some changes/edits I’ve made overall:
- tried expressing Kya’s thinker / intj traits a little more
- Haru still kisses Kya, but she doesn’t hug him. And she realizes he asked her to join him because he liked her
- Kya does know more waterbending than Katara, but not by that large of margin, and Katara isn’t mad at her about it. Just frustrated at first when she can’t learn as quickly as Aang and feeling left behind (pirate ep)
- Instead of Rui dying while writing his letter, he wrote it prior. In the case died, he would have something left to say
- Subtly mentioned a sparring partner Kya had in the North Pole, (non romantic) going to write a chapter on it in the Maiden of the Sea book
- When Yue dies, Kya runs after Zhao with the intention to end him. By the time she finds him, the Ocean spirit had already taken him, and Kya watched as Zuko tried to save him. Seeing him extend his hand to someone like Zhao, Kya starts to believe he’s capable of changing. But most importantly, wanted to get him away from Aang as soon as possible. So she chooses to leave with him
- Same tendency to react when there’s injustice