Kuroitsuki7

hey there, I have noticed that you put my story in not to read. Can you maybe tell me what was it that you did not like? 
          I want to improve my writing you see...
          I would appreciate it very much if you could give me an honest review...
          

ForgivingMess

one last thing I recommend is getting a beta reader, if you done have one already 
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ForgivingMess

i said breaks twice on accident lmao
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ForgivingMess

Also I recommend changing your first chapter up a bit, to me it reads more like a summary which i don’t know if you were going for or not. Make is so when it’s describing the events of what happened instead of making it read like a summary make it more read like a fairytale. Sorry if that doesn’t make much sense i don’t know how to describe it better then that, but making it read more like a fairy tale makes it easier to digest instead of throwing events in the way. :)
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