For a beginner, your story is good. I myself has made many attempts to make totcf fanfic but can't make the story more interesting.
I just want to say your story is good and please keep up with this book. I wish to see the end of this story, unlike other books that never finish. Overall, I look forward the next chapter.(ง •̀ㅁ•́)ง✧
Ps:english is not my first language so sorry if I say something pressuring for you.