Superhomo

What do you guys think of 'Marking a New Mark." I could use the votes and inputs<3

Superhomo

Starting a new story. 
          --Natalie has moved around a lot when she gets placed with a foster family and starts at a new school she finds herself making friends with the wrong people. Her and her friends go on a camping trip that goes bad when one of them get killed on accident.--
          How does it sound?