Hmm. Well I would say that it is a little fast paced which is totally acceptable because of the chapter limits, but that could be fixed if you went back and added little things here and there. I really like how it is now though. I feel like they totally need to kiss though because even though it was AMAZING I was kinda sad that they didn't get to "seal the deal" at the end xD. And about the spin-off, I think it's a good idea and I'll probably read it, but then again I don't know if you want to make a totally new story and say it's just a spin off of another. You should do it but I'd call it its own story. Jeremy seems like he'd be a very interesting character (sorry I forgot how to spell his real name xD) and the plot seems interesting, but I almost feel like it'd lose a little bit if it's specialness if it was strongly connected to IHAS, you know? Okay that's a lot, but that's it xD.
