SweetPea

By the way, it's from Drarry

@Linkagers68 thank you for pointing this stuff out. i really appreciate the feedback but unfortunately that story has been discontinued but if i ever do start writing in it again i’ll take what you’ve said into consideration  and thank you and i hope you have an amazing day!

And lastly, the build up of the characters and story need a few editing and rewriting because the story is already great you made it your own, you created your own story but that has became the problem, your see you are doing fanfic and in doing so you need to make sure that the essence of everything in the story has a resemblance to the original wuth your own touch, so please read this and i hope you might learn from my observation and sorry for being to nosy and criticizing but your story is great and I would like to help making it better.

Now firstly i have observed from your story style that you use 1st and 2nd person povs, I personally hate using povs in fantasy or any genre that requires huge coverage and details to it, that is to avoid plot holes and other constructive problems in the story, but if your really keen in using 1st and 2nd povs then i would like to suggest that you first grasp the essence of the characters your using the perspective from and the plot as well as the story itself so that you can create a story with the same essence as the original with your personal touch. 

My bad lol  

Omg. I’m not even kidding I forgot I was writing that story  

@SweetPea607 that sucks it must be bad like I hate people copying other people's stories btw are you still gonna update the drarry story bc I wanna see more chapters but if not it's fine :D

No problem bb they are so well written. I’m in love with them☺️

@SweetPea607 I'm glad too

Glad*

@Idonotknowu I’m glade