@Kiedaedollface Hey, I just read all you've posted on illegal love so far, and I like it :) very...interesting..mysterious really. That first chapter is killing me, all those bad things and then you start at the beginning with chapter 2. I like where it seems like its goin. Your a goo writer at that too. Also I was thinking of suggesting changing like that alot, from past to present, dosnt drag the story but helps create suspense and keeps the story interesting :)