Hello, Sylver. I know you seem to have been inactive for a while, but I did skim through your book Psionic Academy and I have some thoughts, if you’d like to hear them.
You have excellent prose and drive to write your story—one hundred chapters, posting almost every day is extremely difficult (if only I had that dedication!) You were clearly excited for the project, much respect to you for it.
About the story itself, I think it struggled from a lack of character voice. Shane, at the start, is a very interesting character, he’s a bored prodigy who’s sick of school and is searching fruitlessly for something greater, but he loses that when he leaves for the academy. He also doesn’t seem to have any particular arc of his own, and lacks initiative. I found this to be true of all the characters, they fell flat for me.
I also struggled to take the Onyx League seriously, since they appear to have no real connection to Shane and don’t necessarily oppose him. They also took attention away from the main intrigue of the story: the psionic powers. I wanted to learn more about them but found I was interrupted by their nonsense.
Anyway, those are my critiques! I am writing a book of my own called Stormbreacher, maybe you would like to check it out?