RoseyArchlightRain
I really like the story "Akatsuki kittens Yaoi". Please when you have the time, please update
However, I do have some things that needs to be said....
Things seem rushed.
You're rushing the yaoi. The relationships
It's understandable with Kisame for he's a shark but with Sasori? That's not him at all. Are you going to do a harem? Or no... Because I'm curious about that.
Also, I'm unsure about what's happening with the others.
Are they cats?
Did they turn back to humans?
There isn't enough details to go about.
The story is good, however things need to be changed a little.
Another thing, what about that girl? There wasn't much to go about her. She's a spoiled brat yes, however you should build up the characters
I'm not trying to hate on your story, it's just, I would rather say something than to not say anything.
But yes, if you could update the story, I would really appreciate it
Talonz_Gurl
I will try to explain more in the next chapter when i get a chance to brush up on my naruto verse. There is no real thing with sasori. As much as he is one of my favorite red heads i also understand that he is more manipulative than emotional and that was what i was trying to bring out. He was acting in such a way for the shock value. And possibly to piss off kisame. He's trying to dig for information without putting himself at risk. He recognizes that the person hosting hem has dangerous secrets and wants to learn them before the others to see if he can exploit them The housesitter was just a vehicle for the plot to start where i wanted it and she will only show up briefly in later chapters. Hope that clears up a bit sorry if i rushed in fast. It's a recognized fault i have in writing. Tried not to give up too much info at once so there would be something to build on. The other members are cats unless they consume the blood and chakra of my omc. Then they get a four hour window of being their normal selves. This is part of my plot point that gives me writer's block since i am unsure what dynamic to give when they interact alone. Thanks again.