Tasnim D.

@ 6dream  Thanks, thanks a lot that means a lot to me. Please don't forget that i will be here also for you if you need any help. c:

I definitely see your point and I am so grateful for the advice it would help me in the story ...you're the best really and I'll see what I can do coz I believe you're right hhhhh...hope you enjoy your journey on wattpad and stay tuned for the next update hhhhh
            btw don't hesitate if you need my help when your write your own hopefully successful story one day

@ 6dream  yes i am new here, to be honest i found this app by hazard. About the story, i think that you should make the story of the little John kind of a mystery that will be solved by Sarah one by one and that will affect her relationship with Travis, either it was negatively or positively. But then you should bring some events that will enhance the exitement of the reader: events will put some trouble in the story because it is going to ne way boring if you continue writing on the level and every single step would be obvious, am i wrong? 
            Putting some surprises is the best way to get the reader's attention, of course if it is written with well-structured  sentences , a certain level of grammar and vocab. 
            i wish i could help more but that way i would destroy my exitement to continue reading it maybe. xD
            Do you see my point?