Tembakwu

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Ok I just wanna point something out and I don't see how people actually like this. Just because you make some acid trip Shakespearean ass description of a fight scene doesn't mean it's a good fight scene. If you say "Villain crackled with a torrent of power, the very air crackling as in his presence. The very laws of nature and reality seemed to warp and bend at his will. Hero was undeterred, mustering his strength to block Villain's reality-bending waves." and then give some half ass dialogue, then that isn't a fight scene. You just described two moves and spewd out words in between. 
          	
          	This also applies to writing like this in general. If you try to sound all sophisticated and even theatrical, reading it is plain horrible. It doesn't make you sound smart or good at writing, it frankly sounds like you pulled the shit straight from AI

Tembakwu

esta mensagem pode ser ofensiva
Ok I just wanna point something out and I don't see how people actually like this. Just because you make some acid trip Shakespearean ass description of a fight scene doesn't mean it's a good fight scene. If you say "Villain crackled with a torrent of power, the very air crackling as in his presence. The very laws of nature and reality seemed to warp and bend at his will. Hero was undeterred, mustering his strength to block Villain's reality-bending waves." and then give some half ass dialogue, then that isn't a fight scene. You just described two moves and spewd out words in between. 
          
          This also applies to writing like this in general. If you try to sound all sophisticated and even theatrical, reading it is plain horrible. It doesn't make you sound smart or good at writing, it frankly sounds like you pulled the shit straight from AI

Tembakwu

Yall wanna know how I found out about Justin Roiland's allegations? I was watching a guy play the High on Life DLC and he asked about Kenny. You know, the gun that sounds like Morty? Well, he asked about it and then immediately said something about Justin Roiland's allegations. Which begs the question..........Why did I just now find out about this? (Completely ignoring the fact I was offline for months)

Tembakwu

Some of you probably won't read this but I'll still say it.
          
          I won't be updating stories for at least 5 1/2 - 6 months. The reason is I'm going to Basic Training (9 weeks and a few days) for the military and after that, I have to go to another training (16 weeks and a few days) to teach me how to do my job (Wheel Vehicle Mechanic). So I won't have my computer with me nor will I even be online every day like usual.

JamesonCollins1

@Tembakwu Its understandable dude. Good luck and hope you do well.
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