The3RejectsOfSociety

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The3RejectsOfSociety

Hey! So, as you may have noticed, I have published a new story! The first of my original creations, I am not abandoning Against All Odds, but I had writer's block for that, and I wanted to get something done. I hope you enjoy the prologue. I do not have a definite plan for the story, just a general idea I'm going to feel out as I go.
          I also recently finished watching both seasons of Inside Job. I was sad when I got to the end, so I'm taking it upon myself to create a story for it! Going beyond season 2! Brett was absolutely adorable in my eyes, so you might know what's coming with that.
          Stay tuned! 
          Venus~

The3RejectsOfSociety

Hey everybody! As you probably noticed, I've been making changes to an earlier chapter. As I said in my last announcement, I will be editing previous chapters for better grammar using Grammarly. I will also be making changes to a few chapters to ensure things make sense as the story progresses. I will start work on the next part of Chapter 3 soon! ~Venus

The3RejectsOfSociety

Hey guys! I will start work on the next chapter next week! I am currently on vacation, and while my problems are still well problems, after recently being sick and watching some chapter two play throughs, I have been given the divine gift of motivation! 
          
          Might take a while, I will also be editing the earlier chapters with Grammarly, and changing something to make part of the story make sense

KachiSertona

Hi Venus! You asked my thoughts and as a practicing copyeditor I’ll do what I can to help make your prose look pretty while you’re getting used to this whole “being an author” thing. 
          First, dialogue. You always put punctuation at the end of sentences, and this includes dialogue. “You put punctuation at the end of the spoken dialogue and inside the quotation marks.” Like that. 
          Whenever you switch from one person talking to another, you start a new line. There’s an exception, but you don’t have to worry about it yet. So, for example:
          “Angeline is speaking this line,” she says. 
          “Lilith responds. She keeps it short.” 
          Angeline does something here, “Now she’s exclaiming something!”  
          Typically in professional prose you won’t use anything other than the double quote marks for dialogue. Since Lilith is using ASL it’s understandable that you’d mark her dialogue with different marks. But do keep in mind that ASL is a language in and of itself and thus she is talking, so it would be more proper—so to speak—to use the normal dialogue tags. However, this is your story and you’re allowed to do whatever you want.

The3RejectsOfSociety

Also, I'll work on that thing with Lilith, I haven't noticed that
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I have noticed that about Angeline, I am getting to the part where she's more involved, the whole thing where she doesn't have her meds will come into play later, the chapter I'm working on is focusing more on her
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KachiSertona

Story logic observations. 
            Why is Lilith doing all that to get Angeline’s attention when she can clap, whistle, stomp her foot, or snap? She seems to do anything other than the easiest way to make a noise. Heck, I wouldn’t be surprised if she had a little pet clicker for this exact reason. 
            Establish right away, as soon as Lilith needs to say something, that she’s using ASL. From then your readers will assume she’s using ASL unless the story says otherwise. Also mention the mechanical backpack earlier and be clear about it; it took me a whole chapter to realize the bag was not a normal backpack. Your readers won’t know anything unless you tell them! 
            You’ve got a great ability to describe the setting and what characters are doing, which is a good skill to have. Make sure you establish things early and clearly. 
            
            I could go on and on, but it’s important you practice what you want to improve. The Chicago Manual of Style is basically the writer’s Rule Book For Everything if you care to look that up. 
            Most importantly, keep writing! And good luck!
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The3RejectsOfSociety

Okay I'm sorry my schedule is all over the place, having mental problems, creative blocks, stuff getting in the way, the whole shabang! But, I am getting back to work on Against All Odds, not sure when the next chapter will be posted. I have moved my writing from my phone onto my laptop, so I might get it done faster, and I'll do my best to get it out soon, I'm thinking of other new stories to start work on when I reach the end of chapter four and have to wait for the release of chapter five, I am open to suggestion should you have them!
          
          ~Venus

The3RejectsOfSociety

Okay so I don't know when Against All Odds will be updated again, I'll try to finish Chapter 3 before Christmas, I'm focused on I know Its My Destiny right now so I don't know when the next chapter will be written, and
          
          Also the next chapter of I Know Its My Destiny will be coming out late because I was sick for a few days.
          
          Also it's pretty much just me on here now, so I'm gonna edit some stuff on the profile. 
          
          Stay Tuned! -Venus