EwanKidner
Hey there, I thought of some more suggestions for the rewrite, I updated the previous suggestions a while back, I’m not sure if you saw it. maybe you can check later. But for now I have these, I want to know what you think
1. A running gag, Akikta could have a long cut scar over his face, his brother used to make joke stories, like ‘he got that scar fighting the mighty king of dragons’ and ‘he fought 10,000 soldiers and left with only that scar’. And later Nakji and some others look at it and start coming up with ideas about how he got it, like ‘he fought of a king salmonid while blind’ and stuff because Akikta initially said it was embarrassing. Then later on Akikta reveals the hilarious truth, he actually just slipped over in the bath when he was younger
2. Akikta could maybe learn some of the inkling language because he’s a fast learner, which leads me to the next part. Maybe he could build a computer out of some scrap (impressing Nakji) and the computer is specialised and made well enough to hack into anything, but its encryption can’t be hacked by anyone, even more advanced inkfish like Marina have no idea how.
3. Speaking of Marina, perhaps he could be online friends with her early on, but not know because she’s called ‘DJhyperfresh’ and he doesn’t know who that is because he doesn’t hack, or study the name, but he finds her relatable because they have some things in common, he doesn’t share his human thing obviously, but he shares things like having a harsh background, liking technology, and having to learn the language and culture of inklings a bit more because he’s ’from somewhere outside’ all of which they online relate to, they may only talk a few small times, but it could be interesting. Perhaps In this AU, Akikta actually saves Marina and the others from a few side order things, like perhaps he could find the canonical security flaw in the phones before it’s exploited, and maybe give her instructions on how to make a better failsafe in her project,
EwanKidner
I just noticed a typo, it says hog rather than hug. Oops
EwanKidner
Let’s say he’s actually responsible for multiple problems in the present day, like the new spirhalite stuff, just like how I mentioned him being the one who made the sanitisation serum in a previous one, perhaps he could have been the one to invent spirhalite for a different project, and it spilled out during the alterna disaster, and that makes him responsible for things like the splatoon raiders stuff.
7. Perhaps have Akikta have a bit more of a playful side, we see in the original, Nakji hugging him, but if you ask me, it seemed more like Nakji loves him more, he definitely liked her, but it never felt as strong in my opinion, but to make it more equal, perhaps have Akikta tease her sometimes, like maybe one time he could teasingly say something like ‘no hog this time? If you aren’t going to hug me, what are you even good for’ or maybe he could play the drums on her belly sometimes, and she smiles and says ‘hey’ and swipes his hand away. Stuff like that.
What do you think of these?
EwanKidner
Stopping smollusk from taking over and her from being taken or having problems. (As a human, his mind obviously works different from an artificial inkfish mind, so he isn’t able to be uploaded like the memory crystal based minds of inkfish, making it so he can safely study the phone’s flaw without being sucked in or anything) he could perhaps tell Marina that there are some problems and even give her an idea to fix thing before they happen. This would be a good plot point, after all, a small change in the timeline could drastically alter some things (like the entire side order plot-line). Him being friends with her means she could potentially also vouch for him later on, as he helped (even saved) her from a lot of trouble, meaning he can’t be all bad, as a bad person wouldn’t have helped her without asking for anything in return.
4. Have a funny thing like this, as Akikta possesses some knowledge and understanding that inkfish don’t (let’s say he even understands all their biology and tech better than they do) he could possibly be the smartest person alive currently, his failures are always linked directly to his emotions, like how he could be desperate and that lowers his pre planning, and his desire to help his brother makes him more unstable at some parts, not as in insane, but more like he can’t think straight. He gets used to it eventually, but it takes time.
5. A tragic part, have Akikta be more directly responsible for Chaska’s transformation, this would set him into an even bigger guilt, as he’s not only saving his brother, he’s making amends for a mistake he already made. This would add more to the story, let’s also say that Akikta actually does already know how to fix him, but for to a time limit problem I mentioned in a previous idea from months ago, he can’t, he doesn’t have enough time to do it, making him more desperate.
6. Something else about Akikta, perhaps you could make him have a project he was working on back before the alterna disaster,
