EwanKidner
Hello, I know you are rewriting your series, I was wondering if you would take some of my past suggestions into account.
For example, I said you could make Akikta have musical anhedonia, meaning he doesn’t get joy from music, this is because a lot of fanfics talk about the music of Splatoon and humans liking it, perhaps having Akikta being someone who doesn’t like music could be an interesting plot point, and since he’s not an inkfish, calamari inkantation for example would have no effect on him as it’s not in his DNA, and since he’s human, other things like hypnosis, sanitisation serum, fuzzy ooze, etc, won’t work on him the same way, since hypnosis affects humans to a very small scale if they are even susceptible, and the serums were specifically designed to be used against inkfish, he still isn’t very strong, but he has certain advantages that the inkfish don’t’
Also, you could add certain traits to Akikta to make him a little more interesting, for example, perhaps make him left handed, have it so he usually uses his right hand out of habit of trying to look normal as most people are right handed, but he’s much better with his left hand, so he uses it when being serious.
Or, you could make Akikta more adaptive, same tricks don’t work on him twice kind of thing, eventually he sees everyone’s attack patterns enough times to know exactly how to counter them, perhaps he also has a knack for setting up traps, first time he uses a net, but an inkling just squid form’s out of it, but next time, he uses a special material that either has no holes and is difficult to rip, or something that stops inklings and octolings from changing forms, maybe inventing some sort of vibrating technology that stops their muscles from changing forms or something, perhaps he could make a serum that mixes with ink, making it act more like glue, 1 drop and the whole ink puddle becomes sticky to inkfish, but he found a way for it to not be sticky to him,
EwanKidner
Making it impossible to get his help even if he was willing.
Moving on, Akikta can perhaps, find out that inklings came from the memory crystals, and that they respond to certain musics, even though he isn’t into music himself in this version, or maybe he is still if you want, he experiments with a small sample of dna he found, and perhaps finds certain melodies that affect them like calamari inkantation, but unlike that song, he could make ones that have melodies that weaken them, or perhaps a noise frequency that makes it so that when they hear calamari inkantion, it actually causes them to getter weaker, rather than better, or maybe even use an alterna lullaby that would be in the memory crystal data, and if he manages to make enough of it, they go to sleep via memory crystal programming, he doesn’t even have to sing, he could just whistle or something, although perhaps he could sing the lullaby one and after making amends with the splatoon, one of them says that he had a beautiful singing voice, not that he would notice himself though.
Lastly for now, we know Inka had a crush on Akikta and he was a bit oblivious, I personally don’t think he needs a love interest, perhaps you could have the inka plot line, and Akikta is still oblivious, but in the new version, he is asexual and aromantic, and THAT is why he is oblivious, because he genuinely can’t understand it as he is not someone who feels that, I’ve seen many romance things in stories, and I think this would be a new take as not many stories generally contain aspects like that, some do, but I think it would add a little more to the plot line personally.
So what do you think of this advice, think you might take it?’
EwanKidner
He made it as a way to control the memory crystals of alterna better, like capturing and controlling data received inside of them such as memories, Akikta made sure it was harmless to humans, but since the serum is what the inkfish are made from, and Akikta didn’t consider them for obvious reasons, sanitisation serum affects them, where their ‘souls’ are actually a form of chemical data that can be manipulated within them, this would make Akikta feel even more guilty with over 10000 suffering because of his creation, let’s say that some of it may have leaked out during the time of alterna into the world, or maybe when alterna was destroyed, a barrel Akikta kept got dragged out, then after one of these happened, Tartar found it drifting near the metro, and started to mass produce it after seeing it affect inkfish, Akikta can discover the serum if he passes by the metro, but keep the fact that he made it to himself, although maybe he could find a sanitised octoling, and unlike Marina, he knows perfectly well how it works, even knowing several differences to how Marina came to understand it in side order, and he knows how to make a serum that reverses the affect, so he helps one octoling, curing without even needing mem cakes because of how well he understands this, maybe after the soa story, we can see the octoling again, then that’s when everyone else finds out akikta’s other secret when the octoling explains that someone called ‘Akikta’ fixed it, perhaps it can turn out that the memverse didn’t actually fully heal everyone, some octolings that were exposed longer were too far gone, and they realise that they will most likely not be able to cure the remaining octolings who were exposed over a long period of time without Akikta’s help, but he’s obviously gone, and they don’t know if they can fix what happened to him, or if he would even help them after leaving him in Atlantis, maybe in the later stories, it could turn out Akikta actually escaped at one point
EwanKidner
I think a better issue for Akikta would be this, he was cryogenically frozen for 1000s of years, that kind of long term cold can damage cells, this would also explain some of Akikta’s weaknesses and occasional dumb moments due to minor brain problems, perhaps Akikta could, from the very start, or a little bit after, know he’s on a time limit if he pushes himself, and that he had little time, perhaps a couple months if he’s lucky, but he needs to either find or make something that can repair his body, this could add to why he helps eosalmo, this time, he admittedly doesn’t trust him much, but he’s kind of the only option, so it’s less out of blind trust, and more out of desperation, this would make him feel even guiltier as from the start, he would have known he could just do it himself, rather than hurt others to get it done faster, he could say to himself ‘Akikta, you already had the resources to fix yourself and try to help your brother, but you chose to hurt others to get it done quicker, what is wrong with you?’, also he hears eosalmo has human tech, and as he might initially believe the inklings and octolings wouldn’t even understand his condition, he sees human tech as the only option, even if maybe he, let’s say, figures out eosalmo isn’t human earlier, the fact that he has human technology is too tempting too let go, this temptation would further his guilt later on, also, perhaps later on, he could even start having pieces of his body start decaying due to his condition, requiring him to cut off the pieces so it doesn’t spread,
Also, perhaps Akikta could even have a resourceful grasp over technology, maybe he could have a knack for making things out of junk, like maybe in alterna, he learned how to make air shoes that can glide over water and land at high speed, which he can use to escape trouble a few times,
Here’s another one, a dark element, remember sanitisation serum?, what if it turns out, Tartar didn’t make the serum, Akikta did,
