@TheSatisfiers
I like your first novel, I haven't finished it yet, and I'm really waiting for your new novel.
But the real problem is that the paragraphs are too long and can be tedious and visually jarring. So I think it's better to divide the paragraphs, for example, by leaving a space between the dialogue between the characters, as if they are answering each other, And leave a space between each line of the chapter's narrative. This means dividing the chapter into shorter paragraphs. I think this is much better than having one long chapter with many long paragraphs. It's better to have the characters speak in short paragraphs and The chapter's narrative also consists of short paragraphs.
Finally, this is my pov, it's my opinion. Do what you like, but I think this is better, and good luck for you ❤️❤️