Hi author !
For starters, I LOVE reading your work and I’m always excited to read every new chapter.
Since you’re planning on double-checking WYLL’s grammar, here’s some very small things i noticed:
1) When talking about a ‘whether or not’ situation, if you want to start a line with ‘Even’ you must add ‘if’ ! Ex: “Even if they invited me, I won’t attend the party”.
2) Make sure to double check the verbs you conjugate. You sometimes 3rd singular and 3rd plural when using uncountable nouns.
Other than that, you’re a wonderful writer, and I wish you to make something special out of it !
Much love x