The_Idealist23

@The_Idealist23 you....y....uu....you....you...y-you.... YOU JUST RUINED ALL MY THEORIES :'( O.O
          so i shall be a couch potatoe!
          but i can't... for now...
          Apparently, i know what was wrong when that happened, doc told me so... it was the beginning of an ulser ... dun dun duuuuunn i had other problems too, but losing weight was my main one xD haha funny _-_ 
          now if you excuse me, i shall go watch Amadeus :D ... .. yeah

@oj_ninja no time would go pretty much the same way. if you fell into space though time would appear slow to you but when you come back to earth you'll see you're friends have grown up...literally.
             well having a high metabolism makes it pretty impossible for u to gain weight unless you become couch potato living off potatoes. then you'd get some weight in no time

@The_Idealist23 .... but falling through the ceiling would be amazing *.*
          Tell me, If I fall into the sky, would time go faster, or slower? would it be going backwards? 
          Woah....
          I'm losing weight, not a good thing for me actually, since I have my ADHD, and a high metabolism,it's hard for me to gain weight,and i just began but because of my sickness i lost everything D: i should be happy? I think not xD 

@oj_ninja o.O i hated whenever that happens. but at the same time going on a diet from that stuff is good for you. don't worry the withdrawal symptoms wont have you falling into the ceiling..

@The_Idealist23 what up man... My life sucks now o.O my doctor said that I can't eat anything sweet, or junkfood, or spicey food... or ketchup and all that. I'm pretty much running on vegies and fruit, mainly watermelon... can't even have lucky charms :'(
          so what's up with you?

@LucyCoates7 no, thank you. I read only the first couple of paragraphs and immediately saw your story was a breath of fresh and slightly disturbing air, and not like the usual vampire/werewolf/high school adolescent fiction that is everywhere. I look forward to reading more of it when I have the time. say hello to carboard for me :)  

Thanks for fanning and adding my story to your interest thingy:)
          Ps. I know cardboard in real life,  im sat with her now x

I have read your thread in Improve Your Writing club but I decided to post in your message board instead. 
          
          Please do critique my story entitled Torn. It belongs to Thriller/Mystery and Vampire categories and has NO romance on it. 
          
          Improvement is what I aim for and the very reason why I'm here on wattpad. In return, I'll read and leave a feedback on your poem.