The_Niki

Read the new and improved version of Diary of a Demigod. Prologue is out!!

The_Niki

Hi fellow peoples. I know I don't have many followers but those of y'all who do follow me I wanted to ask for an opinion. I created this prophecy for my book Diary of a Demigod which I may or may not be rewriting . . . again, and I wanted for y'all to see if it was good. Please, please, please give me critique even if you believe it needs only the slightest change. I want this prophecy to be perfect, well not perfect because there's not such thing, but as good as it can get. 
          So here it is: 
          The four corners of the world 
          All together by death 
          Shall meet in beyond the abyss 
          By the power of Earth, Water, Fire, and Air 
          The feathered daggers, a moonlit scepter, 
          The poisoned lash, and an all-seeing eye
          Will come in hand for triumph or ruin 
          Over the Just One who created it all 
          The 24th month of the 51st year will break to the fall 
          And only one is bound to survive this mighty haul. 
          Thank you. :)

Svanderwalt

@MerrilRose change haul to fall, I would change Just One to something else. "Just" sounds like "just enough", not "valiant and just", if that makes sense??? Otherwise AMAZING. WE LOVE YOU!!!
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bookworm34568

whats ur favorite book on wattpad? mine is either the 'badboy stole my bra' by @Cherry_Cola_x
          or 'turncoat' by @_golden_

The_Niki

@bookworm34568 I cam't really decide because there are so many good books on wattpad. I'm really superhero books though.
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The_Niki

@bookworm34568 I can't really decide there are so many good books on wattpad. I'm really into the superhero genre though.
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The_Niki

Thanks so much! I actually stopped writing the device a few years ago but I was thinking of doing a new and improved version of it after I'm done writing my other book. But I'm not positive I'm gonna continue or not. Thanks so much though for reading it.