The_Pottermore

@ourhalfbloods You got potential, just a few mistakes here and there(my story's like the mistake itself, so don't feel bad about mistakes, everybody makes them). The idea of Annabeth betraying Percy right at that crucial moment should take big impact on him. So a suggestion, when you get to a fight scene, where he's almost defeated (like the one with Achlys), make him turn real dark there, that'll give you a really epic edge.
          	
          	So, best of luck!

The_Pottermore

@ourhalfbloods You got potential, just a few mistakes here and there(my story's like the mistake itself, so don't feel bad about mistakes, everybody makes them). The idea of Annabeth betraying Percy right at that crucial moment should take big impact on him. So a suggestion, when you get to a fight scene, where he's almost defeated (like the one with Achlys), make him turn real dark there, that'll give you a really epic edge.
          
          So, best of luck!

abbyb_

Hey The_Pottermore!!! I read your story Sealed Fate, and let me just say, you're a great author!! I'm sorry to say that I didn't particularly like the plot, but you used pathos in your story which made me bawl. I didn't like how Percy died and it was just over with them. If Percy had really died in the books, I'd... Well, I'd DIE. Do u have anything that's positive on Percabeth's future? That's really what I like reading. 
          
          Overall, good writing, but I didn't like the plot. (I feel like I'm being brutal now, so plz don't take this the wrong way)
          
          P.S. U should check out Percy and Annabeth- Their Future by @PercyAnnabeth20owl bc it's FREAKING AWESOME!!!
          
          Stay awesome opossum!!!

The_Pottermore

@Bianca_Ginny_Katniss Er, approved story. (typo) It will have a more positively planned future ahead for Percabeth.
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The_Pottermore

@Bianca_Ginny_Katniss Well, the sequel to "The Hero's Presence" will be a Percabeth approves story.
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