I published Part 2 of Satam Ghoul and am working on Part 3. It should be about the same length. I also edit for MYCHEESEC4KE and do both of these in my spare time. It'll be a bit longer for each update.
I looked over your work and didn't see really any problems with it. The most I found was just commas nonexistent. But in the future if you need me to, sure.
I published Part 2 of Satam Ghoul and am working on Part 3. It should be about the same length. I also edit for MYCHEESEC4KE and do both of these in my spare time. It'll be a bit longer for each update.