Terra 48

@CreativeDreamJewel 
            
            Hi, yes, I did. And I it give an idea for the Echanto story, but it's going to take me a while to write it. 
            
            But here's my story:
            
            It would be about my Oc, who is Bruno's only daughter, Helena Madrigal.
            
            Bruno is the first in the family who got married, and Helena was born soon enough, making her the first/eldest grandchild. 
            
            Her mother goes by name Lynn (Evelyn being her full name). She was raised by her single father as her mother died from illness when she was 3 (the same time when bandits attacked them). She and Bruno were childhood sweethearts, much to surprise of everyone.
            
            Helena's gift is super spead, so she is constantly tasked to build and repair around town. However, she loves to work at her maternal grandfather's cafe (Lynn's father) and is frustrated that chores take most of her time. 
            
            As Helena grew older, she and Abuela constantly had clashes with each other. Abuela is bothered by Helena's rebellion additude, while Helena is frustrating with Abuela's need for perfection. 
            
            It was also well known in town that Abuela and Helena have a tense relationship. 
            And all crashed down when Mirabel didn't get her gift. After Bruno saw the future, he lied how he couldn't see to protect Mirabel, but that still didn't please Abuela and after all fight between her aganst Bruno, Lynn, and Helena, they decided to move out Casita and live with Lynn's dad. 
            
            From then on, Helena did chores when she wanted and started to play pranks and no one could stop her.
            
            When movie comes in, Helena will help Mirabel and it would be her who goes for the candle (not to save candle but destroy it) but she hit her head when house collapsed on her, and ended up in coma. She would wake up only after the Casita is rebuild. 
            
            
            What do you think? Do you want to see her relationship with other family members?
            
            Sorry for my garbage English.

Of course, I've only read the first few chapters but I think its pretty cool. 
            
            I think dialogue and how Terra's talking fits the conversation is really good but you could add more background action as well. For example describe what's going on in the background, what everyone is doing as they are talking, etc. Because in the show we can see what's happening so we focus more on what each person is saying, which is why in fanfics authors tend to forget readers can't 'see' what's happening and so have to describe actions as well.  
            
            This also links to setting the scene when starting a chapter so we get a sense of how characters are feeling before actually seeing how they act and how it all ties together.
            
            I love Terra's personality!! I like how Terra's this really confident character who's basically amazing at everything, but, remember this gives writers the great chance to give a character some sort of fault, or insecurity, which she could try to hide from other people or feels really insecure about, which would overall make her character more wholesome.
            
            I love Keith and Terra's dynamic though, especially how the other paladins start to pick up on it. 
            
            Overall, its a great fanfic and I'm having a lot of fun reading it!

@Idrkwhatimdoing678 
            
            Sorry to bother you, but I would like to hear what you think of my fanfic so far?

Alteans do live in peace, but I figured they probably would have had problems of their own. For example Allura's supposed to be this kind welcoming princess but when she finds out Keith is galra she disrespects him quite a lot.
            
            Allura and Riley have typical sibling rivalry but later on we see how much they actually care about each other. But I do agree with you, that bit was kind of rushed.
            
            I was planning on revealing the whole half human thing later on in the story lol
            
             And yes, I've already started reading your KeithxOC story and think its great so far! Thanks for the feedback!!

@Gotnolife52 
            
            No problem. It is interesting story.
            Mind giving mine story a chance?

@Gotnolife52 
            No problem.
            I hope you'll enjoy my fanfiction as well.

@thebookloverforlife
            Not a problem