BehJun

@Tinykryptonite sorry I didn't pay attention to the date :p 
          I still think at the level two years ago it should be better than this.

Tinykryptonite

@BehJun fineeee I'll edit my book more when I have the time =~= honestly after reading it again I agree...just a slight bit, but it just needs some changes~ the story is still the same
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BehJun

I might try something similar to SAO, not definitive though. And I just read your story 
          To say the least, I'm kinda disappointed in the development and language, though the plot is a good idea. But meh, it's your story.

Tinykryptonite

@BehJun high expectations I see, the development and language can probably be explained due to the fact that I started this book like 2 years ago with 8 short chapters and didn't touch it until recently, where I edited it into 4 longer ones and updated my story with one more chapter which is mainly descriptions of the characters But meh, it's my story.
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