curiousloi
You sent a link for you book on group chat. It's good but.....Your narrating is a bit off. The dialogue is scattered. I was confused on what was going on in some parts. You capitalize where capitals aren't supposed to be. It's unattractive in a book. Correct that. All in all, your story is interesting.
Toba_Speaks
@curiousloi I'll work on it. Thank you for your honest opinion. There's most to come, hopefully. And it'll be great to work with you☺
