Pwede po magreact? I really love your story. From the plot down to the unexpected secrets that are busted and to be busted. But sa totoo lang, I hate your choice of words. Parang shortcut siya. No clear spacings. Too OA author's note and medyo magulo ang setting of the story. I'm not that professional in writing but I just wanna share what I know. By the way, JAPANISE is not the correct spelling. JAPANESE po. Thanks. :)
Continue your story. Acceptable siya. Pero medyo magulo and not readable.