TuckerSword

Thanks for the feed back! Before the gym class, I'll add some dialogue between the main character and some classmates about the aliens orbiting Earth. What would you recommend with the sentence form?

Looks pretty good
            I recommend working on some of the way the sentences are formed. 
            I also recommend including people in the school as written talking about how they think ye aliens would be like or how it affects them 
            It's like character development 
            
            Keep up the good work!