Hey Bro, I love the concept of your story but maybe some grammatical error needs to be corrected.
Some chapters had Obito written in it ( I know you told me that you worked on earlier project related to Obito so it's fine)
Instead of writing like this:
We shall go from other route said Naruto, Kushina agreed to him.
Maybe you can write like this:
"We shall go from other route" said Naruto. Kushina agreed to him.
Small changes on grammatical error and sentence formation will make your story go from 7/10 to 11/10 bro. Reading your own story after writing it might help too
I really love this new concept of story
Will keep supporting you.
From,
Some random Bro on internet