TylerRakeRake

i_am_music_criticism

Hello! I hope you're doing well. I'd love it if you could check out my story. No worries if you're unable to, and feel free to delete this message if you need to. Have a great day!
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/352777699?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=i_am_music_criticism

TylerRakeRake

New story loading Naruto alter if anybody can help me message on my profile and I'll tell about the first chapter 
          
          

TylerRakeRake

@MioNarus yes but I will send you the Draft
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MioNarus

@TylerRakeRake Alter like one in fate Series ??
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Kakashi_Sharingan_07

Hey Bro, I love the concept of your story but maybe some grammatical error needs to be corrected.
          
          Some chapters had Obito written in it ( I know you told me that you worked on earlier project related to Obito so it's fine)
          
          
          
          Instead of writing like this:
          
          We shall go from other route said Naruto, Kushina agreed to him.
          
          Maybe you can write like this:
          
          "We shall go from other route" said Naruto. Kushina agreed to him.
          
          
          
          
          Small changes on grammatical error and sentence formation will make your story go from 7/10 to 11/10 bro. Reading your own story after writing it might help too
          
          I really love this new concept of story
          
          Will keep supporting you.
          
          From,
          Some random Bro on internet