StarflightScrollworm

One thing you could do, is add more descriptions into stories. Here is an example paragraph.
          
          It was windy today, and Autom was worried that she hasn't lost her chasers. She kept running, her green, leaf shaped tail flailing in the wind. She tried to use her natural color to blend into her surroundings. She was hidden under the root of a tree that was hidden by foliage. "I hope their gone." She muttered to herself. 
          "I think I saw it go this way!" Shouted one of her chasers.
          "Stop the chase. We lost it. Its gone by now. Let's just head back to HQ." Called another voice, probably the leader of the gang. Autom kept hidden until she couldn't hear anything but the wind. It was finally safento come out.
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          Something like that, okay?

Umbriel1227

@StarflightScrollworm Dude, you're fine. I completely understand. Right now my teachers are just giving me some grace, that's literally the only way I get spare time anymore.
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StarflightScrollworm

Sorry. I have school and dont have much spare time.
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Umbriel1227

@StarflightScrollworm Hey, are you okay? You haven't responded in a while. I was just going to ask you to reread my chapter, I made some adjustments and I wanted to see what you thought.
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