UneFilletimide

Hey there! I really need a critic help. Can you help me please??

Thanks so much for the follow and for the support on The Return Series!

Actually I'm changing the date for the story again to when it seems good enough to post because I've had no time and I'm a perfectionist while my writing is decent.  That should work out well.  Sorry again.  Also, I'm so sorry that I haven't been able to critique stories.  

Hey, I have to reply on here because the thread got closed. The story is called 'Welcome to my life'. There are only a few chapter up right now but I'm planning to add more!

Hi! Thank you so much for the critique! :D

Reading your "About Me" section, you seem like a really cool, chill person. Also, your thread talking about reading others stories and critiquing is very true. I don't know you, but you rock :)