Unoriginal_Jackass12

So I decided to wait till the end of the week to check the responses, since the season is finished finally. I nearly had a stroke seeing 300+ notifications. Honestly thanks! Now the main project is Lost Horizon volume 2. Expect some updates on DAL as well. Just a matter of priority list.

Renmant_Halo

@Unoriginal_Jackass12 Yay, I can't wait for Lost Horizon updates!
Reply

Unoriginal_Jackass12

So I decided to wait till the end of the week to check the responses, since the season is finished finally. I nearly had a stroke seeing 300+ notifications. Honestly thanks! Now the main project is Lost Horizon volume 2. Expect some updates on DAL as well. Just a matter of priority list.

Renmant_Halo

@Unoriginal_Jackass12 Yay, I can't wait for Lost Horizon updates!
Reply

Unoriginal_Jackass12

Alright. Update, about 12 or more to be exact. The rest of TSK s3 is out. Season is finished. go enjoy. Bada bada!

Lyricscroll

@Unoriginal_Jackass12 Bro's out here making me feel bad! but ima be real hes cooking with fire and im all for it!
Reply

Luciferchicken

I like your story but I think that yn is almost too op,I dunno i like the writing alot but it feels like his power ups almost comes out of left field and there is little explanation for them.

Unoriginal_Jackass12

@Luciferchicken Right right, sorry for rambling. The reason Alpha and Omega didn't initially work is genuinely because of Divine Power. Now I'm going to seperate this next part to avoid possible spoilers, but--
            
            ____
            
            Alpha--the white hole, and Omega--the big black nuke, are at first glance genuine replications of Black and theoretical White holes. But there is more too them, because Y/n's demonic trait is gravity. Not regular telekinetic powers, no, the actual fundamental one.  And for that reason, there's actually more to be said about it...
            
            ____
            
            Now like I said, Divine power stopped it, as Divine Power's ability to affect "principles", more or less negged what Y/n did. Now why it started working again, well there's a half n half here to be taken into account. 
            
            When Y/n ate the hearts of the gods he fought, he gained their strength, their abilities, souls, etc--but most importantly their divinity, their authority over their personal domains. This resulted in him not just amplifying his raw strength and speed, but also his magical powers. Aka, he's a console with a new firmware update. Aside from just running better, everything he could do got BETTER. 
            
            And secondly, because he could actually stand ahead of most deities now, as much as the playing field became even, people such as Horus and Set still exists. And while both Alpha and Omega became stronger, not by a direct numerical value, but in control and application--it didn't mean Y/n could one shot individuals such as Chief Gods.  
            
            More or less, the divinity changed the nature of the battle, but not the battle itself. It evened the playing field to a degree. 
            
            4. As for the power ups themselves. I won't lie, half it is just due to me being interested into crafting this Typhon like figure after I looked back into Aztec myths, and the other half is because it could show internal and out how inhuman Y/n was becoming. 
            
            Lastly, I'm going to take this as a heads up to improve. So thank you.
Reply

Unoriginal_Jackass12

@Luciferchicken Ah alright. I can clear this up. 
            
            1. Yeah, I'm actually aware of the Op aspect of his character, that was always apart of the initial Idea of the story. But in regards to the portrayal, it's less about how strong he is, and more considerate of him both physically and emotionally, burning himself out. That is to say, a plan is in place. 
            
            2. For divine power, I'd recommend checking out the earlier scenes of Ajuka in this season, as the way energies work is an aspect of the series I've been piece by piece changing, or well recontextualizing to be clear. Since, if I plan to actually keep a consistent power narrative, I personally need to know "How does X do what compared to Y doing it". So, demonic, holy, divine, and even standard mana are being explained throughout the story. I can say we're getting the FULL explanation next season, but for now I'm leaving bits for you guys and gals to consider yourselves. 
            
            3. I admit, my writing can be too abstract for my own good, part of it is me believing my audience doesn't need it spelled out for them (I think it insults their intelligence rather than an ego thing), and another part is just me being fan of esoteric stuff. Now for the issue of Alpha and Omega, completely get it, I was going through the chapters a couple times during editing trying to keep it as consistent as possible, as fun fact--Horus's extended fight at the end was a last minute addition I made because I felt the next part made the gods all seem underwhelming .
Reply

Luciferchicken

Its just a bit confusing 
Reply