hey..i think is uptill now ur story is perfect..!! the things i like about ur story is the DETAILING - THE WAY U DSCRIBE THE CHARACTERS..ND INVOLVEMENT OF EVERY CHARACTER IN THE THEME..MST IMP IS THE WORDS U USE R JST PURE N PRFCT!! to write a teenage luv story @ this age is fascinating thng about u!! coming to ur..story so far is goin perfct with all elements!! i will tell stories r of two type..1st in which nly two r focused within the story..nd 2nd in which mre thn two characters including a villian.!! teenage luv stories r alwz difficult...bcoz the story jst rotates about the hero n heroine..nd while in other stories the hero wrks in two stories the one with the villian nd the other with her heroine..so the readers do not get bore..while the teenage luv story hve certain limits tht r u cnt go beyond tht!! so my point is alwz keep the thrill in ur story so tht readers r alwz kept in suspense nd they will njoy reading it!! okay..in ur 10th chap u jst introduced a new character..so i think tht was the twist in ur story..bt suddenly u in ur 11th chap tht nw jared n rach t together..so the thrill of nathan's character blowed away!! y u were in so hurry?? when u introduced a new character so u should show him in upto 2-3 CHAP nd then u should include ur 11thchap so jst this was point i wanted to say..!! or overall ur story i just love it!! the way u write i liked tht!! keep goin..dnt stop writing..!! as a reader i cn say tht may tht ppl nt leave thier feedback..bt they would definitely liking ur story as i do!! nd keep ur climax in mind nd then write u will get more good outcome!! keep writing, readers r definetly loving ur story !!so will be waiting for ur new update soon !! @priyanka_101