Veekay30

The journey overview video is now attached in the first chapter
          	
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horlahmidey25

Hi Veekay30, I really enjoyed this books the tension is immediate, and the quiet street setting works beautifully. I loved how you balance fear and attraction, that push and pull between Johanna’s instincts and her curiosity is what kept me reading. The stranger’s dialogue is especially effective calm, unsettling, and just ambiguous enough to feel dangerous. As a reader, I was hooked by the atmosphere and the slow escalation rather than action. If anything, I’d just say the repetition of that magnetic pull shows how strong the mood is you’re clearly building something obsessive and perilous, and it lands. I’m genuinely curious to see where this goes.

Veekay30

@horlahmidey25 Thank you for your honest feedback it means a lot to me. I truly appreciate your support.
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horlahmidey25

@Veekay30 That balance between fear and attraction is really effective, and it kept me reading. Johanna’s reactions feel intentionally obsessive rather than repetitive, which adds to the unease. I’m especially intrigued by the stranger’s ambiguity. as a beta reader i'll like to beta read your manuscript and give you an honest feedback. trust me am not changing your tone
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Veekay30

@horlahmidey25 Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts! I’m thrilled the tension and atmosphere drew you in—that balance between fear and attraction is exactly what I hoped would keep readers on edge. I really appreciate your note about the repetition of that magnetic pull; it’s part of Johanna’s struggle, and I’m glad it came across as obsessive and perilous rather than overdone. The stranger’s ambiguity is something I’m excited to explore further, so your curiosity means a lot. I can’t wait to show you where the story leads next!
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