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Hey, I am writing a one piece Fanfic, Lost in seas, Luffy's sister, ZoroXOC, I hope you can give it a try...

do you mind if we feast on PM fics

@YesmeHave  To be Frank of you. It's not bad and it's not good either. At first part of chapter it was good but after isagi join the Pinklock it fell off. In my perspective you didn't write about the how he doing it to win the match instead you just write who score who that's all which kill the vibe from reading for it. For example The first selection and the second selection challenging Rin. I also feel you didn't use his past life memory to his fullest. Try reading other's Bluelock book, you will understand what I meant for it.
          That's all from my opinion.

@P1anker alright sure

sr dawg, was writing and fall asleep, when i wake up i didn't know why it was published ToT.