Hey Vvalpunas, I like your story: it has some nice elements of humor in it. Sparsely using description and letting the characters experience the course of events through mere conversations is a bold move and I'm curious to see how it will work out.
However, your formatting is really putting me through a difficult time as this reads like a continuous script or screenplay for a movie. As it lacks visible markers like paragraphing and partially all punctuation, I find myself unintentionally skipping lines.
Nonetheless, I'm waiting for the next part.
