I have reworked the first five chapters of my work. The reason for this revision is that I feel my story has not performed as well as I had hoped, and I believe the main issue lies in the opening chapters. At the time, I wrote without a clear plan or outline, which resulted in a rather fragmented and generic progression of events. The early chapters lacked the ability to engage readers and also contained several logical and grammatical flaws. Therefore, I have made an effort to revise and improve them.