WashioZakuro

@ WashioZakuro  I was just curious, I have an idea of something you could add to the story though.
            In chapter 10 when YN walks on Lightning by accident, you should mention even though he had seen and felt all her glory last night? It was still mesmerizing like the very first time.
            I was thinking as well Fang pretty much catched on what transpired between him and Lightning last night because she spots a deep red hickey on his neck he forgot to cover by not putting his coat on.
            When he tried to deny it and regret his choice of words, add that that was worse than outright admit it.
            Also you have a bit of a typo when he gets up the bed to go for breakfast. You should phrase that part as in putting his pants and shirt.
            And finally, for the very ending, when he says that the view of Lightning topless was worth losing his breakfast, you should also add their special night from last night was also worth it, worth fighting for to have all of this every day and every night.
            
            Just wanted to compliment that bit of chapter 10, spicy it up a bit 

@mr_joe_343 No, I'm sorry. I wanted to stick to a happy ending. And to be honest, I don't feel like replaying Lightning Returns to write the story on it, I hate these games that have a countdown timer to rush you or trigger events at certain times. Even more so when you can't use any of the solves because of random number combinations that only show up in a certain place at a certain time. It drives me crazy and prevents me from enjoying the game.

@WashioZakuro haven't heard much from you on your X-Men story, until yesterday or so

@BoogBryant115 no it's not that, I'm just curious to know why you were worried about me. ^^"

@WashioZakuro is it wrong to be concerned about someone??