Dracula4now

Did u like my story?

Dracula4now

alrr tysmm <3 I'm glad you responded. I'll try my best with my grammar according to my stories <3
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Wehsat

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@Dracula4now yeah, it's great. Although I can give you some suggestions (no hate). 
            
            1. I think you can improve with your grammer (even if english is not your first language, you can just improve with punctuation. As a reader and fellow writer (I write ffs) I can assure you, having bad punctuation can ruin the experience of reading). 
            
            2. You can improve a little bit wity your characters. I can see potentials in them. Like It's just a little bit weird that they are changing their feelings towards her frantically. 
            
            3. And that stranger part is a little bit boring and do not make sense (no hate). Her brother and parents not having any deep feelings (like any) do not make sense as well. 
            
            4. I just hope you do not make her forgive them. Topics like rape, childhood traumas, and abandonment is alot of bigger than we think, and directly or indirectly she was harmed because of her family and their lack of investigation of even common sense. 
            
            5. You made the family powerful, but they seems so dumb, because nobody even tried to investigate or listen to other side which is super weird because it just don't make sense.
            
            And offcourse, at the end of the day its your story.
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TreasureScribe

• *Title:*  A Wandering Soul ✨  
          •*Genre:*  Humor, Youth Fiction, Slow-burn Romance, Enemies to Lovers
           
          • " Jia has a color-coded life. College sends her a chaotic roommate, an egocentric boy, and zero peace. She’s not looking for love. She’s looking for her timetable.
          
          •*Tropes:* `
          >FMC-led  
          >Enemies to Lovers  
          >Hostel Life 
          >"Hotly Smart" MC  
          >Found Family 
          >2am Overthinking`  
          
          •*Why you might like it:*  
          
          ~If you’re tired of pick-me FMCs → Jia called a boy "egocentric bastard" on day 1 
          
          ~ If you love comedy with feelings → Emily sleeps like a feral starfish + jia with her sarcastic remarks 
          ~If you want slow-burn → Aster said "quit the act" in 
          
          
          
          •*Link:* `
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/403481694?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=TreasureScribe