Weird_n_insane
Hey guys! I don't really don't want to bother you all but I would really love your help. I have lost all motivation to write more of my story, "Troubled Past", due to the fact that I just don't know where to go. If any of you all get a moment, please read it and give me some suggestions. I really love the story and want to finish it but just can't find the words. Thank you!!
KnowingToast
@Weird_n_insane I'll attempt to write my own stories, no promises as to their quality though. You're welcome. I'm glad you liked it, I was afraid I may not have captured the characters properly. I'm excited to see the rest.
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Weird_n_insane
@KnowingToast can you please start writing. I mean actually sitting down and writing your own stories! Please! I want to read them. O.o thank you for this. I don't really know what else to say. This is incredible. I've already got most of the next chapter written and I will definitely have this in the front of my mind! Damn. O.o
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KnowingToast
@Weird_n_insane Enraged by this act against him, he forgets about Tommy and chases Addie into the kitchen, but this is Addie's house, she knows all its ins and outs. She grabs a knife as she runs through the kitchen and pushes it through Richards abdominal area. Richard falls to the floor dropping the gun. Addie, only shocked for a second on the thought of killing someone, quickly runs into the other room back to Mr. Wilson and Tommy. She gets down to Mr. Wilson's level, he's fading fast. He says her name. Addie replies "I'm here. I'm here." He calls to Tommy who was already at his side. "I'm right here dad" as he holds him tighter. She lets a single tear fall. *Insert heart felt goodbye from Mr. Wilson directed at Addie and Tommy (something along the lines of be good, take care of Tommy)* Addie can't hold herself together anymore and collapses into Mr. Wilson. All the while, Richard still alive, writhing in pain grabs the gun and starts crawling his way to the room with the family. Just as Mr. Wilson is fading out, Richard makes it to the room, aims his gun and takes his shot. Addie shocked by the sound turns to see Richard dead, holding the gun. He bled out. She can't feel anything, she looks down, no blood. She looks over at Tommy, he's in shock, his shirt stained red. He looks at her "Addie" he cries out before falling to the floor. She screams and rushes to him, cradling him in her arms. " You were the best big sister I ever had." He says through tears. Addie trying to comfort him "No, don't say that. It's going to be alright. Stay with me." She grabs a phone to call an ambulance, but it is in vein. Once the ambulance arrived, Tommy was long gone. Sorry for such a long post, I forgot I was only writing a suggestion half way through. Hope this helps.
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