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@meggo_the_eggo_ Thanks! But,   d o n t   l o o k   a t   s h a t t e r e d   t i m e l i n e s .

@Wolfdragon890 
            
            These stories are really cool! But three things:
            
            1. You didn't put nearly enough paragraph breaks (at least for my taste). I can't read it very well, and it's easy to lose track of what part you're reading, and that can make you lose track of the story entirely.
            
            2. You completely lack an introduction to your books. Where are your characters? Who's even there? What are their thoughts? What are their personalities like? When is the story taking place? I feel kind of... thrown into the story, without any explanation. When I actually backed up and realized what the flip was going on, I genuinely enjoyed it - you're a good writer! You just... might need to work on the introductions a bit.
            
            3. Sike! There's no third thing! (I forgot lmao)
            
            Again, your stories really are good! This is just supposed to be some ways you can improve. I know I have a long way to go as well, and this is how I would want other people to review my stories (with constructive criticism), so... here you go! You're welcome, I guess!
            
            (holy shit broke 1,000 characters)

Plz lemme go ta sleeeep 
            Ich have school tomorrow; 9:00

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