KMilesXD

Hello Wolveen it's KMilesXD, I don't know if you saw my review on your prologue chapter just check it out. So sorry for responding so late, was busy with college exams

Wolveen

Oh hey KMilesXD, I was taking a break from writing cause I was thinking of writing an original series so I was busy thinking of stuffs on what to put in the story. But don't worry, I'll reread the prologue and maybe publish the 2nd chapter though I think it will be delayed
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Wolveen

Oh hey KMilesXD, I was taking a break from writing cause I was thinking of writing an original series so I was busy thinking of stuffs on what to put in the story. But don't worry, I'll reread the prologue and maybe publish the 2nd chapter though I think it will be delayed.
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Wolveen

Oh hey KMilesXD, I was taking a break from writing cause I was thinking of writing an original series so I was busy thinking of stuffs on what to put in the story. But don't worry, I'll reread the prologue and maybe publish the 2nd chapter though I think it will be delayed.
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KMilesXD

Hey Wolveen, it's KMilesXD here!
          
          Just went through your latest chapter and here is my observation:
          
          I like how you introduced Mikel and his friends into the DXD storyline via the Three Factions summit. Also you've answered my question I was going to ask about the letter tattoos on their bodies. 
          
          The STRIVE - a good name regarding to their tragic past and overcoming that obstacle together. Also their an assassin group, so I'm asking what is the group's purpose and who specifically do they target?
          
          Introducing Afgrond's spells in Dutch is uncommon in an anime fanfic, but stranger things have happened.
          
          The only thing I didn't like in the chapter was how quick Mikel became familiar with the canon characters. I thought because of his past, he would distrust new people, not to be mean or anything, but Mikel being an charmed to complete strangers is just so ... random
          
          Which leads me to my next point: How come most female characters at this point become so infactuated with Mikel, especially the main characters of DXD? I mean it's not a bad thing, but I hope that it will not be the case when he interacts with other female characters later in the story.
          
          All in all this was a fairly good chapter

Wolveen

@KMilesXD Also, as for their main purpose, is to find the vampire who is responsible for killing Mikel's mother and brother. Though there are also other reason for their group but I'll just let you know via the upcoming chapter.
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Wolveen

@KMilesXD I really appreciate your review man! Okay for Mikel's strange attitude regarding his interactions with the canon characters, it's just an act and you'll know why on the next chapter as I deliberately did that to confuse the readers a little and show Mikel's personality.
            
            And for your last point, it is just to emphasize his beauty. All of us appreciates outer beauty but it doesn't mean inner beauty don't matter. They still don't know him yet and the way he interacts is a little alien to them so I think its a logical reaction from the women.
            
            You really helped me a lot, I really hope you keep on reviewing my fanfic! Also I love how you noticed the little things so I really appreciate your review!
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KMilesXD

I'm just curious, out of all the people on this site, why choose meas your reviewer? I mean, I am not a writer but a reader.

Wolveen

@KMilesXD You're welcome man.
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KMilesXD

@KMilesXD Thanks so much for your kind words
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Wolveen

@KMilesXD Though, I also asked darkdracul to give his opinion about it and it was a good one.
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KMilesXD

Hi, Wolveen. Sorry for not getting back to you, I was busy on college stuff. I just went through your story and since it's fairly new, I cannot give an overall opinion of it yet,but it holds some potential.
          
          The MC Mikel has a tragic past and also lost his family to vampires, resulting to his apparent resentment towards them and his enslavement.I would assume that your MC is Romanian and is he inspired by the Uchiha from the Naruto series, particularly Sasuke?
          
          The first half of the prologue didn't show much, albeit of Mikel and the blonde hair boy ( forgot his name) older. I'd think that the story will be written in the flashback fashion. 
          
          I am quite curious what Azazel is in store for Mikel and his friends and how this will affect the DXD storyline, including interacting with the main character.
          
          The only flaw in your story is that you wrote that Azazel has red eyes, while in fact he has violet eyes. I don't know if you have watched the manga or anime, but a word of advice, describe the canon characters the exact way they look.
          
          I apologise in advance if my review seems unclear for you. I think that you have a potential for this story, because in my opinion I like reading male OC stories.
          
          All in all, keep it up

Wolveen

@KMilesXD No man! Your review is crystal clear and thank you for reviewing it! I really need this, the opinion of the readers I mean. As you may know, I'm still new to writing a story so your review really is a big help to me.
            
            As for your questions, no and yes. No, he's not a romaniam but was still from Europe, he is a dutch. Yes, but I also added some other features from other characters and change his attitude that you'll see on the next update.
            
            Also, about the flashback, I'm thinking of making the next chapter for the start of the dxd timeline. As for the flaw, I already revised it. Thank you for pointing that out
            
            Thank you man for giving me your opinion about my story. I really need the criticism. I hope that you'll still help me improve in writing a story!
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