@WriteMyLife11 Well, third person (he, she, them) is the best way to add all the detail you want without too many "I's." Also When you are describing a way someone said something, try to avoid adverbs or things ending in "ly." One more good thing, is to make sure that your using all the senses for your character. If you have any more questions, I'll be happy to help. Just remember to write, write, write, and worry about editing the story after its done.