Skylarmadhatter
Hey XxToffee Tic TacxX I was wondering if you read my story Secrets of the Rainbow Bag can tell me what you think about.
XxToffeeTicTacxX
I read it! It was good! It has a lot of potential! I do think it moved quite fast in some places and a few bits could use a bit more explaining! also there were some grammatical errors that need clearing up.
I would say have less done by the narrator and have more scenes so we can really get to know the characters as they sounded really interesting and that would let readers get more out of what looks to be a really interesting story!
