@StillSearchingForMe Thank you so much for that! I'm very self conscious about my writing (like many people) and I didn't think anyone would enjoy it that much. You really made my day! As for tips, I'm not sure what to say. Don't worry, though, you're not bothering me. Anyways, this is my first time giving tips to anyone so...my advice is to try and not leave sentences choppy, at least try and make things sound logical and just try to enjoy and play around with the story. You are the author after all. Hope I helped s bit and thanks again for the kind comment :D