Jedi GrandMaster Yoda

Yo man, if possible could I ask for your criticism in any of my works? I feel like I need both someone to help me improve my writing, as I already have a vampire constantly telling me to write. 
          
          You could be as brutal as you want, I can handle criticism! I'd suggest my School Bus Graveyard story because it's both the most recent, and I wrote it in a matter that even those who don't know the webtoon can follow it along and enjoy it!
          
          Thank you for your time, amigo!

Fine Yoda, here https://danbooru.donmai.us/posts/3688534

HELK
          

Following you because of your name. It made me laugh for 3 consecutive hours