Yoosana_707

@HippyHollowSaiyan I see....that’s actually very interesting I don’t think I’ve ever seen a fanfic like that. That’s actually really cool! I would suggest taking your time with the story.
            Rushing the story  can make your readers uninterested since you’re giving them the story all at once.  That’s the only thing I see wrong now that you’ve clarified the story and characters.

@HippyHollowSaiyan I actually haven't played that & this is its own canon. This takes place up in heaven where the souls have kept in limited touch with what's happening on earth. The souls have all their mortal memories. I've heard it felt rushed but I also don't wanna drag the story out. I see the Dio arc as the most epic part so I want readers to make it to it

Well it seems you tried to reference Jojo’s Bizarre Adventure Eyes of Heaven and somewhat succeed but I have a few questions 
            How does Young Jonathan remember everything?
            How does Erina remember living life till the end?
            Same questions for the others.
            I was confused for a few things and while having a stand is great not everyone needs one and some of the story felt rushed.
            It’s best to keep it accurate to the original story as much as possible 
            I did like that you tried to reference Eyes of Heaven so maybe try to go for something like that.