Yuki

@Yuki-koto Will you mind if i betaread it for you?

@horlahmidey25 “Thank you so much for the thoughtful feedback! 
          	  You’re right—the subtle approach to the romance is intentional since I’m aiming for a slow-burn direction. I really love the idea of the romance becoming another ‘threat’ to Lila’s power, so your insight is incredibly helpful. I’ll definitely keep this in mind as the story progresses.”

@Yuki-koto Your opening is strong the concept, pacing, and atmosphere work really well. The ability to hear the future is compelling, and Rowan’s introduction immediately adds tension.
          	  Where I see a big opportunity is in the romance layer. Right now it’s subtle, which is good, but leaning into a slow-burn dynamic where attraction complicates her power and increases risk could make the story even more gripping. Romance here shouldn’t feel safe; it should feel like another threat she can’t ignore.
          	  I can help by strengthening emotional beats, sharpening romantic tension in key scenes, and making sure the relationship arc develops naturally alongside the suspense. If you’d like, I can start by breaking down Rowan and Lila’s dynamic or revising a scene as a model example.